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Isolation Time  


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30/11/2018 4:34 pm  

I've just returned home after a 3 week stay in hospital, of which I spent 8 days in isolation, and I wrote a number of poems, and this is one of them.

Isolation Time.


I’ve been hidden away

Out of sight

Out of harm’s way

Locked in my room

A poet Pharaoh’s tomb

Or a butterfly’s cocoon

There’s a shining light in my bubble

On top of all my rubble

Above the deathly quietness

I’m a lonesome chick in his nest

Or a bear with a sore head

Hibernating in his bed

Tucked away for winter

Living in an Eskimo’s igloo

Day after day, I’m wearing old

Isolation my saviour, from the cold

Phil Hess
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30/11/2018 9:35 pm  

I like the intriguing first two lines.

I'm not sure the title is enough; without your comments at the top I don't think offhand I would know what "Isolation Time" should mean here. What about just calling it "8 Days in Isolation"?

The wording of the last two lines confused me just a little. I assume that "wearing old / isolation" means that it's a defense against the "cold" of the outside world. What about just saying that to make it simpler: "I'm wearing old / isolation, a coat against the cold" ?

Poems usually move the reader from point A to point B, but here we're still at point A at the end. You've given us the passage of time, but has anything changed? Resignation? Looking forward to release? Maybe just a word or two would be all that's needed to hint at a change in mental state by the end of the poem.

Sounds like you've kept your sense of humor. I'm curious, did hospital staff inquire about your poetry writing or have any interest in it? Usually we compose sort of hidden away from the world, writing almost furtively, but the circumstances of your composing were probably not completely under your control. I'm always interested in how non-poets view this odd poetry-making activity.


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01/12/2018 4:54 pm  

This is a compelling poem.  I agree with Phil about the title; one of things I look for in a poem is the connection between the last line and the title.  I love it when I reach the end and am drawn back to the title for unity. All of the comparatives are wonderful and brought up images that made me smile and nod; you pull your reader into the isolation tent with you.  Regarding the last two lines, I was most struck by your use of the word 'savior.'  The religious undertones say that, in the midst of your touches of humor, there is something deeper, and it connects with your 'deathly quietness' above. That said, I read those two lines several times, really focusing on your punctuation choices, and felt slightly off-balance. It is the only place in the poem where punctuation happens, so I consider it an important spot on which to focus.  

The thought of you churning out poems in isolation is remarkable; glad they let your muse hang out there with you ! 🙂


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